Lesson 7: Unless there's an
arc, it's not a femdom story, just a femdom setting.
At the end of Cocksitter's Club 1,
Robert resented Lori watching over him and he didn't know what he was
going to do about it.
At the end of Cocksitter's Club 2,
Robert didn't get to cum, but the new, exciting teases from Lori gave
him some sort of satisfaction and he fell asleep happy, for the first
time in weeks. He liked having a cocksitter.
At that point, all your author
instincts should have been yelling “Something bad's about to
happen!”
And look what happened in
Cocksitter's Club 3: Lori led Martha into making Robert wait another
week to have a chance to cum! And then
humiliated him in front of another girl! Robert didn't want that! He made a small choice to deal
with Celeste (the bank loan) but The big Choice still looms, waiting
for the finale like it should.
And in Chapter 4, he made it (not
masturbating in front of the girls, asking Lori to put on his belt
instead) and emerged out the other end of the story a changed man
(being able to thoroughly please Martha when she came home and
looking forward to Lori sitting him next time).
He started one way, learned some
sort of lesson and ended up changed. It's called a character arc,
and without it, all you have is a neat femdom setting, not a femdom
story.
Consider this plot: A man hates
eating his own cum. His girlfriend gains psychic Sex Powers and
forces him to eat it all the time. And at the end, he still hates
eating it!
Huh.
That story just feels lame,
doesn't it? But that could be a whole book, with escalation (first
eating ounces of cum, then GALLONS!), and hot teasing dialog (“How
does that taste honey? Yummy yummy?”) and gut punches and all the
other tricks I've gone over, but at the end... it fizzles out. He
still hates eating cum? So what was the point of it all?
Consider this plot instead: A man
hates eating his own cum. Really hates it- can't even think about
doing it. His girlfriend gains psychic Sex Powers and blocks his
orgasms until he gives in and takes just a little taste. Then she
escalates, using her feminine wiles and new Powers to make cum eating
erotic and sexy (basically Pavlov's dogging him) even if it still
humiliates him. And at the end, when they are relaxing nude, in a
hot tub with all her sexy friends, the girls make a half-serious plan
to have him eat the cum of all their boyfriends's orgasms, for a
whole sex-filled weekend... and his cock stands straight up!
What's the arc? He's come to like
the very thing he once hated, even though it's still very humiliating
to admit. This is the same arc I tried to have in The Dude Ranch,
even though I barely knew what I was doing at the time. When
Dexter's cock gets hard in the very last scene, it's a sign that this
“temporary” kink that he wanted to explore only on vacation will
become a permanent fixture in his life, even at work!
There is a fundamental arc in most
good sissy stories: at first, hetero man doesn't want to wear panties
because they are unmanly, but by the end, he's blushing and helping
his wife shop for him at Victoria's Secret because it turns him on so
much!
If
you don't have the characters change and learn something from their
travels, all you have is a static, unchanging femdom landscape for
someone else to come along and build a really awesome story on.
Writers call that static landscape a setting,
and
they will laugh at you if you tell them it's a story.
A school where boys have to be
kept nude and teased all the time? That's just backdrop, man. Every
day is like every other day until somebody starts an arc, you dig?
An
island where strong sexy women rule, trading nude men like cattle?
Sure, dude, that's a hot setting, but like, what's changing? A proud
modern man shipwrecks on the island and refuses to be tamed? I
guess. But then he comes to love it, and starts helping the amazons
lure more men from the modern world to the island? Now
you've got something.
As the name implies, arcs are not
straight lines. At a minimum they have three points (the Starting
point, the Turn for the Worse, and the End), not two points like a line.
The Start and End points are pretty self-evident, but the interesting
point is the Turn for the Worse.
As
they say in the movie biz, that's when shit gets real. Up until then
it's been all fun and games (Lori reading him Kelli
and Tammi).
But in the Turn is where some of the fun ends (Lori convinces Martha
to keep him denied as Robert thrashes and protests = fun innocent
cocksitter is gone).
So focus on the Turn most of all.
And don't just tell us how much the character has changed, show us.
Robert didn't want a cocksitter
before. Now he requests one.
The sissy hated panties before,
now he sighs and puts them on, even when his wife is away.
The man locks up his own chastity
cage.
He hands over the key.
So many little gestures can mean
so much, if they are part of an arc.
Alright students, if any of you
are left, assignment time! Find a femdom story on Literotica whose
premise pushes all of your hot buttons, but whose characters don't go
through any kind of meaningful arc. Remember, the key is the
character grows or learns something about himself/herself, not just
ends up in hopelessly worse situation by the end.
Give us a Google searchable title
of the story in your comment (links don't work for comments?), and
then, give one way you could rewrite the story to give the main
characters an arc. What could they learn about themselves through
that journey?
If you do the exercise well, and
have been following these lessons, maybe you'll learn a little
something about yourself as well.
OH! See what I did there?
Hope this helps, and see you next
time,
P.F. Dee
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