(This is part 3 of a 4 part story in my "Steel World" universe. Students of my "Better Femdom Writing" series will notice the principles of Hot Dialog and Gut Punches at work here, and this is required reading for Lessons 5 and 6.)
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“Release
day, Mister Lewen! And it's the first one where you actually have a
chance to spurt!” Lori laughed, checking that his wrists and ankles
were secured to the bed. “That's if your wife says it's okay for
me to help, of course. Aren't you excited?”
The nude man blushed. Ten days
into his wife's vacation, his teenage cocksitter had already seen his
cock strain in his tiny chastity cage for her a dozen times. But
every time she giggled at it, he felt like a little kid instead of a
major local bank's executive vice president. He brought home six
figures for god's sake!
He gulped. “What.. what if she
says no?”
“Well,
then we'll just have a normal, relaxing Saturday at home won't we?”
Today the teen was dressed in a
short, light sundress that hinted that she wore absolutely nothing
underneath it. To see her bare, tanned limbs flashing around his
house for the rest of the day, without cumming this morning would be
anything but relaxing...
“Lori,
please! It's been too long already! I'll never survive if Martha
says no!”
“That's
what my brother always says on his release days,” Lori giggled,
settling between his spread legs to bring the key around her neck
into his cage. “He swears
that, if he doesn't cum this
time, his balls will really explode!” She bent low to turn the key
and Robert almost died, watching her pert, free breasts swing under
her light dress. “I'm supposed to let him have a quick wank once a
week,” she giggled, “but it's been three straight months without
orgasm and he hasn't exploded yet! So I'm sure you can go one silly
week more. Here we are.”
His
tight steel cock cage finally came off and Robert erected for her
immediately, like he always did.
“Oh
god, thank you! Please, call Martha! Hurry!”
Lori
frowned at his crotch. “Let me trim down all this hair first. I
noticed it getting a little unruly last time I let you out for a
bedtime story.”
“I
really don't think we need to do that. I'm fine with my pubic hair
the way it-”
But she had already left the room.
Robert groaned, his steel hard
dick painful, but he was unable to do anything about it! A minute
later she returned, with a pink razor, a steaming bowl of water,
shaving cream and a large and small towel.
“Lori,
really, you don't have to shave me!”
“I
don't have
to,” she giggled, sitting cross-legged between his stretched,
spread legs. “But it will make getting your cage on and off so
much easier. And you'll look so sleek and innocent, when you're as
bare as a baby down there- you'll see!”
“Totally
bare?!” Robert moaned, both from the humiliation and the feeling of
her deft hand lathering him. “But you let Derrick keep hair around
his crotch!”
“I
knew I shouldn't have let you watch me blow him yesterday,” Lori
sighed, starting on the edges of his bush with the razor. “And
besides, a close, trimmed scruff around a thick cock and balls looks
manly and commanding. That's not really the vibe you're working
with, is it?”
She giggled as she took off
another swath of hair and Robert's face got red with shame.
He moaned in pleasure as her
smooth hands pulled his cock one way and then the other, slick with
shaving cream. It felt so good, like a slippery handjob-
“Oh
my god, don't spurt while I'm shaving you!” she laughed, letting go
of his cock as it twitched dangerously. “Are you, like, a
premature ejaculator too?”
“No!”
But after thirteen days in the cage, Robert knew the answer was
otherwise!
Lori giggled and gently regripped
his shaft again. “You better not! If you surprise me by
squirting, Mr. L, I'm just going to let go and ruin it for you, just
so you know. And I'll tell your wife.”
Face red, Robert closed his eyes
and used all his will not to cum as the girl continued her work. He
took many deep breaths, and tried very, very hard to not think about
her bare legs and how the short dress kept riding up as she knelt on
the bed. After an eternity, he felt her wiping down his crotch with
a warm towel.
“There
we go, all done! A dick as clean as a choir boy’s,” she
giggled, wiping his cock clean. “And just about as long.”
He opened his eyes and saw his
crotch had been shaved completely bald. He looked so silly!
“Okay,
you've had your fun! Now please...Lori... call Martha?”
“Okay,
okay, sheesh, you're so impatient!” She opened her cell phone and
put it on his chest on speaker, and then dialed a number as she
continued wiping the last of the shaving foam from him.
Martha's phone rung once. Then
twice. Then a third time.
Robert
started sweating. Oh
hell, what if she didn't answer? What if she was hung over, and
couldn't hear her pho-
“Hello?”
a sleepy voice answered. “Who is it?”
Robert almost cried out in joy.
But before he could speak, Lori squeezed his balls hard and made the
'shush' gesture. Robert froze, his mouth open!
“Just
me, Mrs. Lewen,” Lori answered, still holding his balls tight in
her tiny hand. “I called to ask you about something important to
Robert.”
“Oh,
okay. I guess I should get up anyway. They never let the liquor
stop flowing here, Lori- it doesn't make for a lot of early
mornings!”
“I
hear ya,” the teen laughed. “And how's the food?”
Robert gulped. She had made a
noose around the top of his balls with her thumb and forefinger, and
Lori was pulling his balls lower as she talked, increasing his
discomfort!
“Oh
my goodness Lori!” the phone crackled. “The buffets are
delicious! And the beaches are pure white sand- they go on for
miles!”
The teen grinned at Robert, as she
finally let go of his balls but gave him the 'stay quiet' gesture
again. “Come on, Mrs. L. Tell me the real deal- how sexy are the
pool boys? You can be honest, Robert's downstairs watching TV.”
“Well,
just between you and me,” Martha giggled, “they're hot and hung,
every one of them! They don’t have Locking Laws down here,
probably because they couldn’t make cages big enough to fit!”
Robert's jaw dropped, but just a
few fingers around his aching balls kept him from speaking out.
“Mrs.
Lewen!” Lori giggled, using her eyes to remind Robert to keep
quiet. “Have you been a little bit naughty?”
“Well…
a little bit,” Robert’s wife admitted. “If you consider it
naughty letting a hot masseuse oil down your naked body and then...
slip a few fingers where he shouldn't to give you a happy ending!”
“You
go, Mrs. Lewen! You only live once!” the teen giggled as Robert's
eyes bugged out.
Another
man had fingered his wife?! How did she let that happen??
But
then Martha’s voice got serious. “But it got me thinking, Lori…
um… you haven’t helped
Robert out in that way yet, have you?”
“Oh
no, Mrs. L!” Lori giggled, checking around Robert's cock, to shave
twice over a spot she had only gotten once. “A girl of the
Cocksitters Club would never do that without the keyholder's express
permission!”
“Oh
good, good,” his wife said, even as Robert bit his tongue. “So
he hasn't cum with you... at all?”
He was going to explode, right in
Lori’s hands as she shaved him! His balls were tight, and Lori
gave them a quick hard squeeze to bring him back from the edge.
“Nope!”
she giggled.
“Not
once?” Martha asked. “It's been... ten days, hasn't it?”
Robert
gasped. It had been thirteen
days- Martha had kept him denied three days before Lori arrived. Had
she really forgotten?
“Something
like that,” Lori said. “And that's why I called. It's not
Cocksitter Club policy to let men take matters into their own hands.
It's just too much effort to get them back in their cages if they're
not tied down, you know? So, Robert wanted me to ask you... did you
really want me to give him a quick handy, or would it be okay with
you if I didn't? I know you usually only keep him three days, but he
thinks he can go a lot longer, like another whole week. And he just
wants your permission to try- isn't that so sweet?!”
Robert's cry of protest was
muffled by Lori's hands over his mouth.
“Oh
my goodness!” Martha was laughing. “I mean, I've always wanted
to deny Robert longer for longer periods of time... to see how far he
could really go. The girls in the salon always made fun of me, but I
always felt too guilty and let him cum after just a few days!”
“Well
you know what your husband told me? It's like an investment,” Lori
giggled. “The longer you wait, the bigger the benefits will be!
He might even be able to go the whole month! He really wants to do
this for you.”
“Well,
okay!” his wife laughed, and Robert's eyes got wide, making Lori
just giggle. “Just imagining him up there, aching and pining for
my benefit... whew! Lori, my thighs are tingling- I think I might
have to book another massage today!”
“Make
sure you give him a good tip! And that he earns every penny!” the
girl giggled. “I’ll keep your husband locked up nice and tight
to make sure his interest
in you keeps growing! I'll call you in ten days to let you know how
it's going.”
“Thank
you dear! You’re a godsend!” Martha giggled, and then hung up.
Lori giggled and jumped off the
bed as the nude Robert thrashed.
“WHAT
THE HELL DID YOU DO?!” he cried, pulling at his restraints but
getting nowhere.
She
flicked his nuts lightly and Robert calmed down. “What I did, was
make your wife, who is surrounded by hot studly poolboys and pina
coladas all day, get all slippery wet thinking about your devotion to
her. I got her engines thinking about your blue balls and I just
made sure you're going to have some amazing
sex when she gets home.” She wiped off her hands. “You're
welcome.”
“No!”
he yelled. “I don't want that!”
“Don't
you?” the teen giggled, looking at his crotch. “You seem pretty
excited
by the idea.”
“But...
but the masseuse... and the poolboys...”
“Oh,
she'll get a little taste while she's away. All women have to have a
bit on the side nowadays, with their husbands locked up tight. And
the ones with the more extremely...” she gave his dick a
significant look, “size
challenged husbands
usually have a few more lovers than most. I even cheat on Derrick a
few times a year, just to prove that his big dick can't keep me tied
down. Martha will let some young stud lay nine or ten inches of pipe
into her as she's stretched like she's never been before, and then
she'll come back to you, satisfied and ready to hold your key again.”
Robert couldn't believe it. His
wife, getting pounded by a thick cock, shuddering as she locked her
ankles around some stud's back, begging for it harder, faster-
His dick jerked and Robert almost
came!
Lori
smirked and sat in her reading chair again. “Tell you what, Mr.
Lewen, why don't I read you two
chapters from Kelli
and Tammi today
to calm you down and then we can go out to the mall for some ice
cream?”
“No!”
he cried. “Just get out of here! I don't want any of your stupid
story!”
“Mr.
L! Don't be mean-”
“I
mean it! Just leave me alone!”
“Okay,”
she sighed. “Back in the cage you go.”
Within seconds, Robert felt his
balls being stretched as Lori slipped a tight steel ring around them.
“No!
Leave me out! No!” He struggled, bucking and twisting, but she
rode his thighs like an expert cowgirl, fitting on one piece of his
cage after another.
“You
men always make such a fuss about being locked back up without
cumming,” she giggled, as she turned the key with a loud click.
“As if it wasn't the most normal thing in the world.”
***
Robert didn’t want a bedtime
story that night, or the night after.
He stalked and grumbled around
while Lori was there, staying in the opposite end of the house while
she studied or watched TV, and he was a absolute storm cloud at work.
“Having
trouble at home?” Angela laughed, dangling a heel from her
stockinged toe as yet another sales meeting Robert ran went poorly.
“Are you worried about your wife being away for a month?”
“I'm
more worried about your projections for the third quarter!” he
railed, not looking at the woman's shapely legs. Jenny and Angela’s
teasing today had been extra effective in his state. “Why don't
you calculate your whole forecast- again!”
“Are
you sure
you want me to do that?” the tall brunette chuckled, slowly
uncrossing her legs to let him see her black panties for an instant.
They were exquisite silk, covering
a mound he had dreamed of licking for years. But they paled in
comparison to the tiny teen who would be flouncing around his house
when he got home.
Robert shocked the woman by
looking her in the eyes, not the crotch.
“Yes.
I do. All of them. And tell Jenny to redo hers as well. I don't
care if you girls have to stay here all night!”
Angela's jaw dropped as he turned
to leave.
***
After two days, Robert started
being less angry at home, almost civil. After four days, he sought
Lori out.
The teen was reading, laying face
down on his couch while wearing a tight tee and tiny cheerleading
skirt. Her skirt had flipped up a little in the back, and he could
see an unobstructed view of her light blue thong stretched between
perfect teenage buttcheeks. He could tell she knew he was there, but
she did nothing to cover herself. He coughed.
“Um, Lori?”
She didn't look up, just let her
bare feet swing a little behind her. “Oh. I didn't know we were
talking again.”
“I'm
sorry. I was mad- you didn't even ask Martha if I could cum!”
“I
did something better- make Martha think you didn't want
to cum when she wasn't around. Now she loves you even more.” She
reached down to adjust the thong in the crack of her perfect tight
ass. “And then you got all pissy about it.”
The steel ring around his balls
seemed like it was going to castrate him!
“Okay,
I'm sorry! But... it's my release date again. Could we... read some
of Kelli and Tammi tonight?”
“Nah.
You're waiting until Saturday at least.”
“What!”
She finally looked up. “You've
been a real grouch this week, Mr. Lewen. And you didn't go on any of
our morning runs!”
“I'll
go on the runs, I'm sorry!” he said, clutching his cage through his
pants. “This ache in my balls- it’s not normal! It’s much
worse this time! I knew I couldn’t go this long!”
“Sure
you can’t,” she giggled, turning back to her math book and
letting her bare feet swing behind her ass. “You'll start going on
morning runs with me again?”
“Yes!”
“And
letting me read bedtime stories to you every night? We've fallen
behind if we want to finish the book by the end of the month.”
“Okay!
Fine! Just let me out!”
“Saturday
I said. Done.”
“But-”
“End
of discussion,” she giggled, chewing on his chastity key between
her pink bubblegum lips as she kept reading.
Robert moaned in distress, but
went off to watch sports.
Lori's mother called her home for
something before he went to bed, but she would let herself in around
midnight and be there for his morning run. But as he tossed and
turned that night in bed, his dick straining in its tight metal, he
realized something.
He missed her.
Even though she had never made him
cum, he missed her giggles as he erected. He missed the way she
would play-act all the voices and moans of Kelli and Tammi out of the
book, like she was in a recording booth. He missed her kissing him
on the forehead, and seeing her pantied ass as she waved goodnight
and turned off the light.
Robert missed his cocksitter.
***
Things started returning to
normal.
They went on morning runs, Robert
going all out to catch her to see her in the shower, but the girl
always managed to giggle and pull out of his reach, even if he got
closer each day. But things were changing.
His gut was shrinking from the
runs. His ass and legs were getting harder. He didn’t hate how he
looked in the mirror as much. And he could tell the muscles around
his penis were growing stronger. Lori read to him every other night
until he couldn’t stay hard each night, but each time that was a
little bit longer. A few more weeks of exercise and his cock would
rival the hardness any that Martha had found at her resort!
And Lori started inviting Derrick
over again every few days. Sometimes they just made out and she sent
him home frustrated, and sometimes they went farther, Robert spying
from awkward angles as she went down on her boyfriend, or Derrick
clumsily pleasured her with his untrained tongue.
One
night, after Robert had ordered the food and laid out the plates and
sodas for the two teens before he went upstairs, Lori
tied the nude man to the bed before her boyfriend came over.
“So
you won't peep on us,” she giggled. “We're going to do some
adult
things tonight.”
But she did take off Robert's cage
so he could get hard
And he did, listening to the two
teens energetically fuck downstairs on his couch. Lori was either a
moaner or she was putting on a show for both Derrick and the tied up
man upstairs, but Robert ended with a lake of pre-cum on his belly.
After he heard five orgasms, two
of them Derrick’s, he heard the front door close. Then he heard
someone pad upstairs and take a shower in the hall bathroom. And
after a while, Lori came into his bedroom, wearing just a tiny
belly-baring t-shirt and panties.
“Sorry
that took so long,” she giggled, drying her hair. “Derrick had a
lot of stress built up in his blue balls.” She giggled. “I
can’t imagine why.”
Robert’s cock was painful,
jumping and dripping at just the sight of her in her undies!
“Oh,
you like?” she laughed, looking at the dumbfounded man. “Good
little boys who agree not to whine get little presents.” The
blonde tossed her wet hair and struck a sexy little pose, pulling at
the sides of her panties. The shirt still covered her chest but her
nipples were hard visible points under it. “Since you agreed to
delay your orgasm, I figured I’d dress more casually around the
house until Saturday when we call your wife again. That okay?”
He swallowed hard. “Yes!”
“Though
so,” she giggled, stretching her nude legs on the bed. This time
she put her feet right on his thigh, inches from his dripping,
twitching cock. “Now, where were we?”
“Chapter
eleven,” he gulped. “Tammi had just gotten locked into the
harness with the two-side dildo, and it was going to explode if she
and Kelli stopped fucking!”
Lori
smiled. “That's right. Tammi
grabbed two big handfuls of Kelli's nude ass and plunged deeper into
her partner's pussy. “We can't stop!” she cried. “Not yet...”
***
One day Derrick came over, but
then left after just ten minutes, and Lori stormed upstairs in a
huff.
“Can you believe that? His
stupid coach called him for some stupid weightlifting session and he
left without even licking me once! And I'm so horny!”
“You...
really wanted to get licked by Derrick tonight? Between your legs?”
Robert
asked, from where he was tied to the bed. Lori had made him set out
a whole bowl of condoms downstairs- she had planned on fucking her
boyfriend many times.
“God
yes! I was practically dripping at school today! Even putting on
this little outfit gets my engines going!”
His throat felt like sandpaper.
His heart was pounding out of his chest. “You know... I... I could
lick you if you want. My wife says I'm really good at it. And you
don't have to do anything back to me! I promise!”
Robert saw her looking at his nude
body, his hard, aching cock, the restraints holding him securely.
And then she broke out into belly laughs.
“Oh Mr. Lewen! You're so
funny!” She dropped into her reading chair, not bothering to cross
her legs to hide her panties, which were starting to soak through.
“I guess we'll both have to be satisfied with seeing what the girls
get up to tonight,” she giggled, then licked her finger to turn the
page, even as his eyes feasted on the view of her panties. “Chapter
Thirteen. Kelli tasted Tammi’s shaved pussy, relieved they had
made it past the prison guards, even though they were still nude,
trapped behind enemy lines, and very, very horny…”
***
“Wakey
wakey, it’s release day again!” Lori giggled, skipping into the
room in a shirt and panties. “And I've got good news!”
Robert’s trapped cock jumped
in its cage. “Martha said I could cum?!”
The girl nodded as she tied him
down. “She did! I called her last night and I think she felt bad
for um, sucking a few guys off at a late night party? Anyway, she
okayed a quick handy to relieve your balls.” The girl tied down
his last limb, then looked at him. “If you want it, that is.”
“Yes! Please!”
Robert tried not to think about
Martha swallowing some strange poolboy's load- wait, had Lori said
'guy' or 'guys'?- but instead focused on finally getting to cum. And
when she took the tight cage off, he practically yelled in relief.
“THANK
GOD!”
“Ooops,
you've got a little fuzz growing back,” she giggled as he erected.
“Let's shave that off before we start.”
That was another torture, but he
made it through without prematurely ejaculating into her hand, even
if he was quivering at the end, his crotch totally bald again.
“Please,
Lori! I've got to orgasm now! I can't take it anymore!”
Lori smiled. “Okay. Come on
in, Celeste.”
Robert struggled against his bonds
as a short Hispanic teen walked in and then laughed at his nude form.
“Oh
my goodness, it's true what they say about white guys!” the
raven-haired girl said. “That prick is smaller than my little
brother's!”
“Mine
too,” Lori giggled, then patted Robert's thigh. “But he makes up
for it with his personality.”
“What's
SHE doing here?!” Robert roared, yanking at his bonds. It just
made his dick bounce for the two girls. “She can't see me like
this!”
“He
has this thing about being humiliated,” Lori giggled as Robert's
cock danced for them. “It's something to do with being a high-up
bank manager or something.”
Celeste just smacked her gum. “I
know. That's why I'm here.”
“Who
are you?” Robert yelled as the blush spread down his nude body.
“Why is she here? We've never met!”
“Yeah
we did,” the black haired girl said. “My dad came in for a loan
like a month ago, and you turned him down flat. You don't even
remember him, do you, you rich whitey? Pablo De Sosa?”
Robert gulped. It was hard to
think while he was fully nude in front of these giggling girls! But
it was coming back to him...
“Um...okay...
I remember... Mr. De Sosa. Business expansion loan.”
“That's
him. So why didn't you give my dad that loan?”
“I
had to deny him! His credit score was 510!”
The girl crossed her arms. “He
was trying to expand his carpentry business so he could make money
for sending me to college! He's a good man!”
Robert swallowed. “I'm sure he
is. But it doesn't matter what he wants the money for, I can't give
a loan to someone with a credit score that small!”
“Well
I
don't think little dicks this
small should get to shoot their load,” the girl said, sneering at
his erect penis. She turned to Lori. “And you said I got to
decide if he cums?”
“Sure,”
the blonde giggled, swinging the gold chain around her finger. “The
choice is all yours.”
“No!”
Robert begged. “Please, Lori, Martha said I could cum!”
“And
I say my good friend Celeste gets to decide.”
The
mexican girl hooted in laughter. “So I guess you're going back in
your cage with blue balls, loser!”
“No!”
He looked at his cocksitter. “Please! You can't let her!”
“I
thought you really
wanted to cum today,” Lori said. “Celeste is a good friend, and
every boy in school talks about how good her blowjobs are. When she
said her dad needed your help to get a loan, I figured it would be a
no-brainer, Mr. L. You help her out... she uses her skilled tongue
to help you out...win win. Why can't you just give her dad the
loan?”
Robert shook his head. “I
can't! For a loan like that, his credit score needs to be 700, at
least!”
“And
I think dicks need to be at least 7 inches long if they're going to
have any fun in my mouth,” Celeste said. “Lock this little dick
back up, Lori!”
The blond nimbly slipped the steel
ring around Robert's balls as he started to struggle.
“Oh
well,” she giggled, having no problem putting the rest of his cage
on. “I guess we'll try again in three days.”
***
Later, Robert was pulling at his
cage through his slacks as he left for the office.
“Lori,
please, I'm begging you. I need to cum!”
“And
Celeste's family needs that loan,” Lori giggled, putting on her
shoes. “She's a good friend, and you were a bank manager. I never
imagined you would choose to be denied longer!”
“I
can't give a loan to a 510!”
“And
I can't give a handjob to a five incher who doesn't help my friends
out.” She kissed him on the cheek. “Have a good day at work,
Mr. L.”
***
Robert had a miserable day. His
cock cage seemed three sizes too small!
Finally, around lunch, he gave up
and started filling out the loan approval form.
When he gave it to Angela to enter
into the computer, she scoffed.
“A
credit score of a 510?! Who approved this loan?”
“I
did,” he said, feeling the weight of the cage around his balls.
“Just enter it!” he ordered, storming off to ice his balls.
An hour later, Angela and the bank
president, a woman named Marie, entered his office.
“What
does this de Sosa family have on you, Robert?” Marie asked. “Did
they steal your chastity key or something? You know we can't approve
a credit score this low.”
“Mr.
De Sosa is a honest, ambitious, hard working man,” Robert growled.
“He's trying to live the American dream. That's exactly the type
of small business this bank was created to support!”
Marie looked at Angela. “And
you checked? This family doesn't have any connection to Robert? And
his key hasn't been reported stolen?”
“Not
that I can see,” Angela said. She was wearing her black stockings
today, the ones Robert had used to love the best. “They have an
attractive daughter, Celeste, but I checked her social media sites.
I can't see any connection between her and our esteemed
vice president.”
Marie
eyed the nervous Robert, then finally stamped the paper “Approved”.
“This loan better work out,” she said, handing him the form.
“Or by next month I'll have Angela in that chair and you be lucky
if you're shining her shoes!”
Robert held his composure as they
walked to the door. As soon as they left, he exhaled and grabbed his
aching, tight cage, because all he could imagine was being forced to
shine Angela's four inch heels while she was still wearing those
black stockings.
***
“You
did? That's great!” Lori cried, going up onto her tiptoes to hug
the man. “Celeste will be SO happy!”
She was wearing tiny khaki shorts
and tank top, and Robert fought to keep his hands from sliding down
to cup the teen's tight, perfect ass, just inches from his grasp.
“Does
that mean... I can orgasm now?” he gulped.
The blond giggled, stepping back.
“Well...”
“What!”
he demanded.
“You
know how, like, the longer you wait to pay off a loan, the amount you
have to pay keeps going up because of interest...”
“What
do you mean!”
Lori gave him a big grin. “I
mean... we're so close to you making it an entire month without
orgasm. You've never made it an entire month, have you?”
“No.
But Lori, please-”
The girl giggled and kissed his
cheek. “Tell you what. Go five more days. I'll read to you every
night and you'll get to see every pair of panties that I own. And at
the end... I'll invite Celeste back over for a night that you'll
never forget. Deal?”
Robert shook his head. His balls
felt like they were full of lead and the size of tennis balls
already!
“Lori...
I... I can't!”
She whispered in his ear, her hot
breath making his cage impossibly tight.
“I
bet you can.”
***
Really, really like the first part of this story. The shaving, and making him listen mutely to the phone call to his wife . . .where she gives away his orgasm. AND give his wife the idea that Robert can go so much longer than she's ever denied him . . . Shows that Lori's a real professional, making Martha think its his idea (and helps set things up for the reunion in part four).
ReplyDeleteAlso like that Robert now has another penis (and pubic hair style) to compare his to . . .and that Lori denies him the right to pick his own pubic hair style. Reminds me a bit of the old MisterStarkers stories.
However, the bank scenes . . . I'm not sure they're adding much to the story. So a couple of his underling are flashing the guys, and he works for a woman . . . that's almost anticlimactic, compared to the rest of the story. Plus, a 510 credit score is abysmal - Celeste's father must have a recent bankruptcy, or other major, major problem in his background. Even with Lori leaning on him like that, his female boss should've put a stop to it.
If you're going to keep the bank scenes, I think you almost need something more there. Maybe a man's secretary now serves as his minder (officially or not), keeping track of how much work he gets done, and how much time he spends on break, relaying that to his boss (and maybe wife). That way, if he's goofing off, or getting distracted, the powers-that-be know to step in.
And if you want to keep the loan idea, the female boss really needs to step in. Perhaps a scene where she drives Robert home, and (shocked and pleasantly surprised to see Robert's new keyholder) explains to Lori why certain loans can't be made. How certain people can't be trusted with large sums of borrowed money - just as males can't be trusted with their chastity keys. And if you need added flavor, maybe have an antsy Robert look on, totally nude (except for his chastity), in trouble for his lack of "self-control" . . .
Overall, though, I'm really liking this story
I still love this story and everything about it. I did enjoy the bank scene and the way he was manipulated into giving the loan. The shaving scenes had me so very erect in my cage and left me wondering when my release is. Thank you again for sharing
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