Writing Better Femdom Fiction- Lesson 2

Lesson 2: Leave Room For Escalation 

(Or: Beware the omni-fuck scene!)

(This is an 8 part "class" on writing better femdom fiction I've wanted to do for a while.  For the first round, "students" were chosen by volunteering on the message boards of orgasmdenial.com.  Those students will get definite replies to their comments and reviews of their submitted work.  If there is more interest, I may run the class again with another set of students, but no promises for now.)

I know how it is when you're writing a hot femdom story. You write cool stuff. You get horny. That gives you ideas of more cool stuff to put in the scene. Which just makes you hornier, which gets you excited to put even MORE cool stuff into that scene...

What does that lead to? Here's something I see way too often in femdom stories :

A man is traveling for business, in a hotel bar in a city he's never been in. He sees a sexy lady. They talk. He admits that he likes his women to be a bit... dominant. She smiles and invites him back to her place. Once they are one micro-inch inside the front door, she barks:

"Take all your clothes off! Now! And now I'm going to tie you to my bed! Now lick my pussy!  And take my strapon! And put on this chastity belt! Now I'm going to hack your bank account and email so you sign over your house and quit your job and I'll keep you in a cage in the basement of my house forever! You'll never wear clothes or cum again!"

What? 

What the hell kind of first chapter is that? Where can you go from there? And more importantly, wouldn't it be infinitely more fun if we got to see a progression, a struggle, as the man chooses (see lesson 1) how far deep into her clutches he will go? 

 

This happens in CFNM stories, where the male is stripped nude in front of EVERYONE HE KNOWS IN THE ENTIRE WORLD in the very first scene. Why not have him just in an embarrassing micro thong in front of one girl first, struggling not to get hard? And then nude for only her in chapter two? And THEN nude for all her friends in the climax of the story?

This happens a lot in sissy stories too, where the reluctant man is turned into a perfect, dress wearing, legs shaved, high heeled, strap-on taking sissy on his very first day. What? Why not just have his woman make him wear panties under his clothes for a week while he can't cum? Wouldn't that be a delicious, drawn-out escalation? 

 

Because escalation is the key. 

Ramping up the situation from scene to scene makes your story more tense and gives folks a reason to keep reading. Always leave yourself (and your characters) somewhere to go. Because it's deflating (in every sense) to reach a hot peak in one scene, and then have to back down to some lower level of kink in the next scene. 

You could try to have your story at 11 the whole way through, but then you'll just produce some Michael Bay type of ridiculousness with explosions every two seconds that doesn't even work for Michael Bay.

Full length novels have peaks and valleys, high mini climaxes and low resting points for quiet character moments, before building up to a finale. But your short femdom stories don't need that. They can ramp in a more or less straight line from normal life to the climax and still be awesome.

Let's look at CockSitters' Club Chapter One again. In their first interaction, you KNOW I wanted to have Robert stripped nude with horrible blue balls and begging Lori for even a minute out of his cage. But then what would their second interaction look like?

She only got to see him nude at the very end of the chapter, meaning I've given myself lots of rope to play out over the rest of the story and a bunch of readers waiting to see what happens next. (Right?  Right?)

Consider the trend in that story. First they meet and he sees her as just an annoyance. He gets hard in his cage, but hides it. He's uncomfortable talking about orgasms with her. Then he fantasizes about her at night. Then they run and he has to strip in the shower. Escalation, on a carefully metered schedule.

Because really, escalation is the only currency you have. 

Your femdom writing probably won't be full of mind-blowing philosophical insights. It probably won't have hilarious character interactions or deep, touching emotional rebirths. You're writing to thrill. And when something of excitement level 5 happens in one scene, and then a level 5 happens again in the next, that's not thrilling. The next scene should go to a 6 or a 7 to keep readers reading.

I read a story on Literotica called “Falcon and Domino” about a male superhero (Falcon) who, in the first chapter, tried to take down a female villian (Domino) and got tricked, humiliated, stripped and sent on his way. In the second chapter he tried again, and the exact same thing happened: stripped and sent off in shame. In the third chapter it happened again!

I almost stopped reading at this point, but the author somehow pulled a miracle: he reset the stakes.

In the middle chapters, Domino's domination (hey, I just got that!) of Falcon started ramping up from chapter to chapter. First, he was stripped just before her- now she knows his secret identity! Then the proud hero was forced to strip for a circle of female artists- now they know his identity, but they think he just cosplays the hero for fun. Then he was forced to walk through a crowded hotel lobby wearing only a body-painted version of his suit and no mask- everyone in the hotel laughed, thinking he was mocking Falcon with his near-nudity, and his co-workers saw him and think he's an exhibitionist!

Look it up on Literotica, it's a good example of how escalation is done poorly and then well and then poorly again, all in the same story.  (What?  A link?  I'm not your bloody search engine.  Fine, here it is.) 

Students in my class: choose a type of femdom story (CFNM, chastity, sissy, strap-on, facesitting, it doesn't matter) and sound off in the comments about the three levels of fun escalation you can have for that type of story. (And no, if you choose “orgasm denial” as your type, you can't just say 7 days, 14 days then 21 days of denial. You're better than that.) 

If you want to be a great author, try to have five levels of escalation.  

(You don't have to spend a chapter on each level, either.  Just touching one level a paragraph is enough to set the pattern.  But the pattern should have 3 to 5 dots in it.) 

One of the things I'm proud of in my Drake Cheerleaders Incident book is how each chapter reveals a higher level of the story of how cheerleaders tried to use their psychic powers to tease, deny, and almost take over the world. I had to really force myself not to jump ahead, to play out the rope slowly, but I love how the tension is almost a tight, stretched, straight line from the book's humble beginnings to the high climax.

If you remember that escalation is the only fuel you have to keep the plot engine from stalling, and remember to play that rope out slowly, you'll be able to do the same in your books.  

Hoped this helped and see you next time,

P.F. Dee

(P.S- Oh shit, I forgot to talk about what an “omni-fuck” scene is! 

It's a phrase I coined after reading one horrible story on Literotica, where the man and woman literally did every sex act imaginable to each other, their very first time together, in horrible, baffling, non-stop succession. It wasn't hot, it wasn't tense, and now when I see a sex scene lose focus because the author thinks more is always better, I laugh and call it by this name. 

My students, if you are plagued by the omnifuck virus: try writing a short story where only ONE type of sex act ever happens. Maybe it's JUST a face sitting story. You're not allowed to get horny and start having chastity belts, blow jobs or hand jobs show up- just stick to face sitting. It will be a better, tighter, hotter story if you keep focus, trust me.  This also ties in to Lesson 5, coming later.)