tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post6283253992348980932..comments2024-03-28T16:49:32.112-04:00Comments on P.F. Dee's Fun Femdom Fiction!: Writing Better Femdom Fiction- Lesson 2P.F. Deehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15370358226546490989noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post-18862850883880534422014-05-01T22:43:19.665-04:002014-05-01T22:43:19.665-04:00(In my best Yoda voice) "Orgasm or not orgas...(In my best Yoda voice) "Orgasm or not orgasm, matters it does not. Only The Choice important is!"<br /><br />Consider this story: an American college boy, his older sister and her 2 sorority sisters are walking along a beach in Europe, hurrying to get back to the youth hostel before it closes. They come across a sign: "Nude beach. 1 member of every party must be nude or face 300 euro fine." He votes for one of the girls to strip, they all vote for him to strip, he has to or they'll get locked out of the hostel for the night. The girls enjoy the walk back, much teasing occurs, and he is hard and embarrassed most of the way. <br /><br />At the end of the beach, in front of their hostel, it doesn't matter one lick to the story if the girls force him to orgasm before giving him his clothes back (humiliating) or shame him into not jacking off in their tiny shared room that night (even more humiliating!). What really matters is THE NEXT MORNING, when the girls want to take him to the nude beach again- on purpose this time! What does he do?<br /><br />Consider this story: A rich executive hires a sexy personal assistant because she's sexy. She somehow discovers his secret: he sometimes wears panties on the weekends, for no more than a few minutes at a time, just to get off. She teases him with her ultra-feminine manners and clothes until he's begging her to cum in her presence. She might let him, IF he agrees to her 5 month program of being her french maid on the weekends. And she only accepts very sexy, very feminine french maids. <br /><br />It doesn't matter if she lets him cum at the end of her teasing/negotiation session or not. The real last scene in the story takes place 4 months and 29 days later, on the Sunday when his "contract" is up for "renegotiation", and she's brought her female lawyer friends, women he knows, to drive an even harder bargain! <br /><br />In both cases, it's the choice the subs must make that is the highest level of escalation: is this situation temporary, or is it permanent? And what are the repercussions of that? All the sexy escalations are to drive that decision. <br /><br />You and Ozryck have both successfully predicted Lesson #8: "Always end with the possibility of more", because, just like in slasher movies, it's no fun if the evil slasher stays dead at the end. We always want to see that hand burst out of the grave with the credits that say "The End?". <br /><br />If your stories fizzle at the end, you're probably not ending them at the right place. Figure out your levels of escalation, figure out the main character's big choice and its repercussions when he runs out of levels to hide behind, and then, as they say, ride that story hard and put it up wet.<br /><br />Hope that helps, <br />PFDP.F. Deehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15370358226546490989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post-43969694446893345022014-05-01T19:18:39.880-04:002014-05-01T19:18:39.880-04:00You talk about 5 levels of escalation, if that is ...You talk about 5 levels of escalation, if that is what a story has, should the last stage be the final chapter/section; one of the problems I seem to face is the ending of a story. Maybe a male orgasm is what a lot of readers want to have as the end, but from my point of view that seems disappointing and almost a cop-out. I think some of my stories fizzle out in the end with a lack of conclusion - any thoughts?DonnaShttp://www.orgasmdenial.com/DonnaS/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post-50661681595443691082014-04-27T10:16:56.161-04:002014-04-27T10:16:56.161-04:00Mmmmm, that's some delicious escalation right ...Mmmmm, that's some delicious escalation right there. <br /><br />I can already imagine the wife's dialog in each of the stages, ranging from "It's was just a girls' day out, honey, of course you weren't invited!" to "Honey, don't be silly. Grown women sleep in the same bed all the time- sometimes I just want a softer body to cuddle with- it doesn't mean anything!" to "Well dear, she is sexier than you..." <br /><br />And Ozryck, what I like best about what you did is, even after your 'last' stage of escalation, there are still higher places the story can go from there, as the wife's new lover takes control of even more of the husband's former domain! <br /><br />Nicely done. P.F. Deehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15370358226546490989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post-770460358166093142014-04-26T20:06:05.607-04:002014-04-26T20:06:05.607-04:00Ozryck again.
Okay, one of my personal favorite ...Ozryck again. <br /><br />Okay, one of my personal favorite fetishes is lesbian cuckolding—a woman who replaces her husband with a woman lover. <br />To use your stages of escalation, it could begin “innocently” enough with the wife going out and spending the day shopping and lunching with her friend while the husband stays home and cleans the house. A next level might be the husband cooking dinner for the two women and serving it to them while they talk and relax. A later chapter could have the wife calling the husband and saying that she and her friend have had a few drinks and she is spending the night at the friend's house. <br />Then the night comes where the friend sleeps over, in the wife's bed, with the husband sent to sleep on the couch. And from there the friend can move in, displacing the husband permanently. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com