tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post355618145954929465..comments2024-03-28T16:49:32.112-04:00Comments on P.F. Dee's Fun Femdom Fiction!: Cocksitter's Club - 4 (the finale)P.F. Deehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15370358226546490989noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post-43200988490192895942015-12-28T23:04:53.841-05:002015-12-28T23:04:53.841-05:00Toby,
Thanks for your comments! It's stuff li...Toby,<br />Thanks for your comments! It's stuff like that which makes part-time authors want to keep writing!P.F. Deehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15370358226546490989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post-66343720628764456422015-12-28T11:03:58.493-05:002015-12-28T11:03:58.493-05:00This has been nothing short of fantastic, and i lo...This has been nothing short of fantastic, and i loved the way you left the door open for other chapters. I would certainly enfoy anything you wanted to add to this later on. I want to thank you again for sharing this amazing storyslavetobyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10012488930036312827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post-44513290027310280262015-09-13T16:50:12.286-04:002015-09-13T16:50:12.286-04:00I would have hoped that Robert would become sissif...I would have hoped that Robert would become sissified during his Cocksitting adventure! At least, that could have been an extra cost option for the girls in the Club to offer. I can imagine as being a straight male and being cocksat by members of the Club and during that time, being bribed or forced to wear lingerie, painted nails, wigs, etc in order to attempt to achieve release!<br /><br />I just love the whole premise of the story! Great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post-5152993931688066802015-09-10T02:15:58.483-04:002015-09-10T02:15:58.483-04:00On a totally random note - there's something a...On a totally random note - there's something about the shaving scene in part three . . . For some reason, a scene where Robert (or another male) has to look through a photo book of male pubic hair styles (many of them embarrassing), and pick one for himself seems like it'd be interesting - particularly if he has to pick two or three, because his first choices are vetodCasual Readernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post-36985952004178407012015-09-10T01:12:36.782-04:002015-09-10T01:12:36.782-04:00If you ever wanted to write a direct sequel to thi...If you ever wanted to write a direct sequel to this story, I think the option is definitely there. Martha (his wife) likes the results Lori achieved with Robert . . . but I doubt whether she has the skills and discipline to maintain them<br /><br />She'll let him re-grow his hair . . . or simply slack off shaving him. Take mercy on him, and he'll go back to more frequent releases. His bedtime will slip, and he'll start putting the pounds back on . . . <br /><br />So, at some point, Robert is likely going to need some re-training to be a proper slave-husband. And that might be a good opportunity to get the full payoff from some of the secondary characters you've introduced in this story.<br />Lori was great for his initial training, what with the bubblegum/happy dynamic, teen fantasy/cheerleader thing. <br /> <br />So, in a followup, it might be worth using another cocksitter. One with a different sitting style. Someone who knows that he's supposed to be completely bald "down there", and is willing to call him on it. <br /><br />Victoria already seems to be tapped for the puppy boys story, but you still have Melissa (the British nanny girl). Might be interesting to have her pick him up from work (even if he drives), and introduce herself to his coworkers as his cocksitter . . .<br /><br />Also might be interesting to see him read through the "sex ed" pamphlets they hand out to the teens in post-ULL school . . . <br /><br />Another option might be to reverse the situation. Robert has to go away for a lengthy business trip, and someone (either Martha or his boss) arranges a cocksitter to keep him on the straight and narrowCasual Readernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post-29610560415738537632015-08-03T21:48:38.904-04:002015-08-03T21:48:38.904-04:00Have you thought about putting an inscription on t...Have you thought about putting an inscription on the steel ring of his cock cage? You keep coming back to the image of Lori slipping it over his testicles. If there was some sort of engraved motto on it, that adds another level of symbolism to the act. And when he asks to be put back in it .. .its as if he's endorsing the sentiment of the mottoAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7003361213943751481.post-12191125574183473132015-07-27T23:34:48.173-04:002015-07-27T23:34:48.173-04:00Like how you've built in the idea that Lori is...Like how you've built in the idea that Lori is subtly training Robert to be a better chaste husband. Finding new ways to keep him denied each release time, the kegel exercises, introducing him to modern standards for males . . . Its not obvious in any one part, on the first time through. But on a re-read . . . you've done a good job subtly adding the idea in. Kudos for pulling that off, without cramming it down the reader's throat. <br /> <br />Still think you need to do a bit more with the business scenes, though. And having all the members of the Cocksitter's Club turn up in the last story adds a bunch of new characters, for not much payoff. I really like the party idea, and the dishwasher . . . but the British nanny character and the muscled Victoria seem like they're there just so you can say that they're there. <br /> <br />Also not entirely sure you got your money's worth out of Lori's brother. Sure, his existence justifies a monologue or two about what its like to grow up in post-ULL America. But there's not much more payoff beyond that. If Lori had brought over his old chastity cage or hand-me-down restraints, some home movies or chastity pamphlets (a la the old puberty/sex ed pamphlets they hand out in school). . . I think you'd have gotten more mileage out of his existence. <br /><br />Plus, as it is, he raises questions about Lori. if she insists on securing both arms before unlocking a boy, and found that they won't go voluntarily into a chastity device otherwise . . . it raises questions that some readers may find . . . distasteful.<br /><br />Again, though, I'm a big fan of your "Cocksitter's Club" story. Like the themes, and that's a great homecoming scene. Keep up the good work, and I hope to see more from youCasual Readernoreply@blogger.com